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ScriptFrenzy 2011 Excerpt

A Life Less Ordinary




Everyone she knows thinks she's lost her mind. She thinks she's finally found it.

 

The synopsis for my ScriptFrenzy is here.


From Episode 2: Hula Girl at Heart


The title and character in this excerpt were inspired by the song of the same name, sung by Jimmy Buffett.  In fact, my entire ScriptFrenzy has been influenced/flavoured by two albums: Take the Weather with You by Jimmy Buffett, and Maroon by The Barenaked Ladies.  With a few Nanci Griffith and Billy Joel tunes in there, too...

Anyway, "
Hula Girl at Heart” (still trying to think of/find a name...) is an old woman, about eighty, who has some trouble walking. She uses a cane and, on occasion, a wheelchair. I'd envisioned her sitting in her wheelchair as Manny's talking to her. This scene takes place near the end of the episode.  Oh, and this is unedited - my first cut at the scene.  I can already see ways to improve it...but I don't want to get distracted... :)


HULA GIRL AT HEART (HGAH)

What do you think I can tell you?


MANNY

(pleading)

Tell me it's not over.


HGAH

What's not over?


MANNY

Passion – passion for life – passion to learn and do and know – and experience. Life – that there are other ways – that I can still make changes – still make a difference in this world. Tell me – tell me -

(tearfully)

Tell me I'll feel again. Tell me...I'm not dead yet.


HGAH

(pats her gently on the back as she cries)

I'd say you've already answered your own question.


MANNY looks at her, puzzled.


HGAH cont'd

You're feeling something now, aren't you? Your tears are a form of passion, too, aren't they? You were angry, weren't you, when you didn't get that promotion. And you were afraid – horrified – and that's why you quit your job.


MANNY

But those are all negative.


HGAH

But you feel them – you still feel something. If you can feel the negative then you can feel the positive. Believe that, even in your darkest hour, and you'll make it through.


She smiles at MANNY.


HGAH cont'd

No, it's not over – not if you don't want it to be. I married my fourth husband just last week.


MANNY

Really?


HGAH

(nods towards a picture on the mantlepiece)

James. A much younger man – only sixty. I feel like I've robbed the cradle.


HGAH gives MANNY a cheeky grin and a wink. MANNY stares at her for a moment then begins to laugh.

ScriptFrenzy status:  47 pages typed; another 50 handwritten which translates roughly to another 25 pages, which brings me to 72!!!

 

 

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onceiwasaturtle
Apr. 21st, 2011 02:25 am (UTC)
Nice! :D
shirleyann66
Apr. 22nd, 2011 03:30 pm (UTC)
Thanks! :D
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