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ScriptFrenzy 2011 - 2nd Excerpt

A second excerpt of "A Life Less Ordinary".  This takes place early in Episode 9:  Trying to Reason with Hurricane Season.  The title (once again) comes from a Jimmy Buffett song, although it's only the title that really inspired me.  :)

Just in case, the synopsis for this series is
here and the first excerpt is here.  This is a comedy-drama, and this excerpt is more comedy than drama.  :D  Oh, and sorry for the formatting - I'm too mellow to fight with it today.

 

DAISY

You're where?!


CUT TO:


INT. JAIL CELL – DAY


DAISY and REBECCA come into the cell block. ZEKE and MANNY are in adjoining cells, lying on their bunks. They get up and go to the bars when they see DAISY and REBECCA.


MANNY:

Hey, guys.



DAISY

Don't “hey guys” me! I can't believe you ended up in jail!


REBECCA

What's the story? The cop at the front desk was pretty pissed.


MANNY

Oh, that's because Zeke got him all riled up. We didn't do anything really bad.


ZEKE

I would like to say – for the record – that this is all her fault.


MANNY

(to ZEKE)

Thanks.


DAISY

(to ZEKE)

I don't care – I'm blaming you anyway!


ZEKE

Hey!


REBECCA

(to MANNY)

Come on – spill!


MANNY

Are you gonna be able to get us out of here?


DAISY

Depends on what you've done!


MANNY

Well, we didn't kill anybody!


ZEKE

What's this “we” business? I'm an innocent bystander!


MANNY

Oh, please! You drove the getaway car!


ZEKE

(at the same time as REBECCA)

We didn't get away, remember? We didn't even get to the car!


REBECCA

(at the same time as ZEKE)

Oh, my God – you robbed a bank!?


DAISY

That's – that's – that's a lot of time...


MANNY

We didn't rob a bank!


ZEKE

I wasn't there!


DAISY, REBECCA, MANNY

Shut up!


ZEKE

Well, I wasn't...


MANNY

Look...


CUT TO:


FLASHBACK


ZEKE comes over a slight hill towards a beach, where MANNY is sunbathing, although all we see is the back of her head.


ZEKE

Hey, there you are – Ted told me -


MANNY grabs the towel, giving a little shriek as she does so. ZEKE realizes she's topless, does a guy yell and quickly turns his back.


ZEKE

Holy – you're naked!


MANNY

Just topless! I didn't expect you to find me!


ZEKE

Oh, you were expecting Ted, maybe?


MANNY

I wasn't expecting anybody! Ted said this was a private beach, and I could sunbathe nude if I wanted.


ZEKE

Why would you want to?


MANNY

What do you want?


ZEKE

Are you decent?


COP

Yeah, too late now.


MANNY gapes at the COP, then hangs her head and groans.


END FLASHBACK


CUT TO:


INT. JAIL – DAY


DAISY

So, this...Ted set you up?


REBECCA

Indecent exposure? Manny – I'm so proud!


ZEKE

Stop encouraging her! Honestly!


DAISY

On the one hand, I'm with Rebecca. On the other hand, I agree with Zeke – and that can never be good.


ZEKE

Hey!


REBECCA

You should see us when we don't like you. Which brings us to Ted...he deliberately set you up?




Oh,  and 74 pages typed, with another...ummm....close to a hundred handwritten???  Or so... A lot of it's crap, but I'm seriously considering turning it into a novel...  :)

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( 2 comments — Leave a comment )
seren_ccd
Apr. 24th, 2011 01:17 pm (UTC)
This? Is awesome. You? Are fabulous! I love it. I'm so in love with this concept and these characters! And good on you for doing it! Congratulations on your progress! :D
shirleyann66
Apr. 24th, 2011 08:49 pm (UTC)
(cue best Elvis imitation) Thank you, thank you very much. LOL I giggled like a mad woman when I was writing this scene.

And thank you for the cast list - I can't believe how helpful that meme has been! When I'm stuck, I just visualize the actors as these characters, and the words/actions just flow.

I think I now know enough about my storyline and characters to read yours and everyone else's contributions to your meme without running the risk of inadvertently borrowing characters/storylines.

Whoooooo! \o/

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YES. AS PRACTICE. YOU HAVE TO START OUT LEARNING TO BELIEVE THE LITTLE LIES.

"So we can believe the big ones?"

YES. JUSTICE. MERCY. DUTY. THAT SORT OF THING.

-- Susan and Death in Hogfather by Terry Pratchett

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-- Interesting Times by Terry Pratchett

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In the 24th century, there will be no hunger. There will be no greed. And every child will know how to read.

-- Gene Roddenberry, as repeated by Jonathan Frakes in the documentary How William Shatner Changed the World

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We've got two lives, one we're given and the other one we make
And the world won't stop, and actions speak louder
Listen to your heart, and what your heart might say
Everything we got, we got the hard way.

-- Mary Chapin Carpenter, The Hard Way from the album Come On, Come On

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Cause when they own the information, oh
They can bend it all they want.

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Courage doesn't always roar. Sometimes courage is the little voice at the end of the day that says, "I'll try again tomorrow."

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I never loved the soldier
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Or thought about tomorrow
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I never cherished freedom
Freedom never cries.

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It may sound absurd: but don't be naive
Even heroes have the right to bleed
I may be disturbed: but won't you concede
Even heroes have the right to dream

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